Tuesday, April 13, 2010

Last TEASE with Jacki J...

Why yes, I do have Tom Petty's Last Dance with Mary Jane stuck in my head. What? You don't know that song? For shame! :) It's okay. I'll forgive...this time...well, only if you go download it and the video like right now.

Okay. On with the show! Last week's tease left off with Felix swooping in to save Jacki from Simon and Mari. This snip comes just a short while later as Jacki and Felix enter the school. Don't worry. No one notices Felix as he is a master at disguise ;)

***snip, snip!***

10 comments:

  1. OMG WHAT IS GOING ON? I'm intrigued. Really liking the whole thing with Felix ;p

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  2. Wow. This is really good and intriguing. I want to know about everything! And I really like your main character so far. Can't wait to hear more from you!

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  3. I totally went over 500 too lol. I love this part. Whyyy do I not have more of this in my inbox?

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  4. There was a 500 word suggestion? Whoops...

    Anyway, this is great! The stakes are certainly getting higher!

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  5. Great hook at the end there. I can definitely feel a more ominous tone creeping in here. Good tease!

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  6. Hmmm, what's going on here? It seems like she has something to do with the disappearances, or so methinks.

    I'm envious of your writing style. It's marvelous. You seem to have a great grasp on the just-enough-details thing, which I suck at.

    I don't know if I should, but I like Simon. It's his personality. He's kind of pushy (but not really, because 'pushy' isn't a nice word to use to describe someone you like, but I currently can't think of the right word to use) and I think pushy characters get things done. He seems cool.

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  7. Oh wow I'm so curious as to what is happening!

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  8. Oh, I'm totally wondering what's going on...great mystery here! Plus, you do so well with IM. Lots to love! :D

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  9. Man, I am telling you, I always look forward to reading your teasers. Lol Felix, my man! Love that guardian. Hhahaha! But I don't quite like how everyone seems to be pushing your MC around - grabbing her arm, yanking her here or there, blustering at her like she's done something wrong, making her cry. I'd love to see her kick some ass. Kick Simon's ass. Mari & Maddy (if they're mean to her)

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  10. (sorry this is super late)

    I really liked it. I haven't read last week's teaser, but I am super intrigued. Too bad it's the last tease.... :(

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