Karla of House Nellenbach, First of Her Name, the Uncool, Queen of Sarcasm, Treadmill Battles, and the First Cup of Coffee, Khalessi of the Great Gray Toyota, Breaker of Lawnmowers, Mother of Dogs (and one Cranky Cat).
These are my words. This is my life. You have been warned.
Love the cute exchange about being first in line for the shower and the singing. :D Some serious introspection here by your MC. I kinda miss the sexy counselor, tho! :D
"Pain meant feeling and feeling meant life. I wanted to live." Great sentences Karla. Makes me empathise/pull for your MC. You had some gorgeous descriptions in here, eg. muscles rebelled against the after effects etc, shower coughed and spluttered etc. Great teaser.
Good snip! I especially loved the end where the MC is talking about escaping down the rabbit whole with her old friend. Good metaphors. The last line was just...poignant.
As usual, another great teaser. I wonder why she was sleeping in the bathroom though? I love stories like this that centre on characters and open them up. It's beautiful. And congrats on finishing broken!
Love the cute exchange about being first in line for the shower and the singing. :D Some serious introspection here by your MC. I kinda miss the sexy counselor, tho! :D
ReplyDelete"Pain meant feeling and feeling meant life. I wanted to live." Great sentences Karla. Makes me empathise/pull for your MC. You had some gorgeous descriptions in here, eg. muscles rebelled against the after effects etc, shower coughed and spluttered etc. Great teaser.
ReplyDeleteloved the relationship between the two girls!
ReplyDeleteGood snip! I especially loved the end where the MC is talking about escaping down the rabbit whole with her old friend. Good metaphors. The last line was just...poignant.
ReplyDeleteGreat snip, Karla! And how you write so fast, I'll never know. Color me jealous!
ReplyDeleteit better be sent to me today!
ReplyDeleteand the last line, you know why it's killing me.
i love parallels :)
i love this scene, aw luce...
"An acquired taste." Teehee. :D
ReplyDeleteFunny exchange, love the "need more practice."
ReplyDeleteGreat snip. I'm left wondering if that's why she was really sleeping in the bathroom. And I like the image of the rabbit hole too - great metaphor. :)
ReplyDeleteAs usual, another great teaser. I wonder why she was sleeping in the bathroom though? I love stories like this that centre on characters and open them up. It's beautiful. And congrats on finishing broken!
ReplyDeleteYour snip made me giggle a few times! Great job. Love the voice. Congrats on finishing your rough draft! It sounds pretty awesome already :D
ReplyDeleteLoved the rabbit hole line, but definitely loved the last line. Congrats on finishing! :D
ReplyDeleteI love your character's voice! The last few paragraphs were really great!
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