Holy Cow! I finally got my tease down to 500 words! Don't faint guys. I know you never thought the day would come that I would conform to the teasing bylaws, but alas, Hell has finally froze over.
On with the celebration!
It's Hannah's first day back at school, and it might just be a little too soon for her. Poor girl :(
**snip! snip! you guys are made entirely of AWESOME! thanks a bunch! :)**
Wow! I was sad and heartbroken reading this, and then I get to the last few lines and I was just totally blown away.
ReplyDeleteGreat tease! It gave me chills.
I forgot about this one. Wahhh it's so sad. More more more. This is clearly more important than building contracts!
ReplyDeleteThe last two lines... so haunting. I love this!
ReplyDelete"I was dry…desiccated…the Sahara." Such a great line... And agreed, the last two were also chilling, in a good way.
ReplyDeleteWe, the people, demand more. *nods*
I was literally hanging on everyword! GREAT writing!! I was so sucked in by the emotion rolling through her. :D
ReplyDeleteYou wrote her emotions very well. I felt like I was her. And I love how she's upset that her sister is gone, yet she's pissed at her for being selfish by commiting suicide. Nicely done. :D <33
ReplyDeleteThis is perfect. I work in a high school where there's actually a similar situation... I won't go into details. But, yeah, it would be really hard for a sibling to have to deal with everyone memorializing their dead sister every day. Very. Well. Done.
ReplyDeleteI love this SO much. The emotions seem so real. I agree the last two lines are so haunting.
ReplyDeleteLoved the last few lines.
ReplyDeleteKarla, you've conformed? Oh my gosh, it's time for me to go pick up my flying pig! lol
ReplyDeleteAnyway, this teaser was lovely, and it also made me very sad and teary-eyed. I really liked the last line. My heart is breaking for Hannah.
Wonderful writing, this is really addictive stuff. Great tease!!
ReplyDeleteOooh, this is awesome! Love how intense the emotions are..and the ending, BAM! Really gripping!
ReplyDeleteThe raw emotion in this. Man ... so sad :( Loved this teaser, Karla
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely gorgeous. So emotiove.
ReplyDeleteWow. You hooked me, played me, and reeled me right in. Good work! :)
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