Tuesday, May 4, 2010

I TEASE Therefore I Am...A TEASE, That Is...

Holy Cow! I finally got my tease down to 500 words! Don't faint guys. I know you never thought the day would come that I would conform to the teasing bylaws, but alas, Hell has finally froze over.

On with the celebration!

It's Hannah's first day back at school, and it might just be a little too soon for her. Poor girl :(

**snip! snip! you guys are made entirely of AWESOME! thanks a bunch! :)**

15 comments:

  1. Wow! I was sad and heartbroken reading this, and then I get to the last few lines and I was just totally blown away.

    Great tease! It gave me chills.

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  2. I forgot about this one. Wahhh it's so sad. More more more. This is clearly more important than building contracts!

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  3. The last two lines... so haunting. I love this!

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  4. "I was dry…desiccated…the Sahara." Such a great line... And agreed, the last two were also chilling, in a good way.
    We, the people, demand more. *nods*

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  5. I was literally hanging on everyword! GREAT writing!! I was so sucked in by the emotion rolling through her. :D

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  6. You wrote her emotions very well. I felt like I was her. And I love how she's upset that her sister is gone, yet she's pissed at her for being selfish by commiting suicide. Nicely done. :D <33

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  7. This is perfect. I work in a high school where there's actually a similar situation... I won't go into details. But, yeah, it would be really hard for a sibling to have to deal with everyone memorializing their dead sister every day. Very. Well. Done.

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  8. I love this SO much. The emotions seem so real. I agree the last two lines are so haunting.

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  9. Karla, you've conformed? Oh my gosh, it's time for me to go pick up my flying pig! lol

    Anyway, this teaser was lovely, and it also made me very sad and teary-eyed. I really liked the last line. My heart is breaking for Hannah.

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  10. Wonderful writing, this is really addictive stuff. Great tease!!

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  11. Oooh, this is awesome! Love how intense the emotions are..and the ending, BAM! Really gripping!

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  12. The raw emotion in this. Man ... so sad :( Loved this teaser, Karla

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  13. Absolutely gorgeous. So emotiove.

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  14. Wow. You hooked me, played me, and reeled me right in. Good work! :)

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